The T Force vs The Demon Squid
The story starts at the edge of the galaxy where an evil wizard was conducting magic experiments. He found a way to make terrifying creatures from stardust such as the crocowolf (a wolf and crocodile), the bearrilla (a bear and a gorilla), and the flaming lizardasaurous (a lizard and a dinosaur on fire). But worst of all was the demon squid. “Haha” said the wizard, “with these creatures I will take over the galaxy” but then the squid ate him and all the other creatures then set off to find more stuff to eat. The squid travelled the galaxy eating planets, moons and even darth vader's death star. It finally came to earth and the avengers tried to stop it but they all got eaten too (well……..What did you expect? That thing already ate 3,000,000 planets). Earth was doomed so the prime minister called THE T FORCE (that's right they’re back!!!). They are me, my dog Turbo, Kirsty and Jack. They threw a bunch of fireballs and laser blasts then Jack turned into a dinosaur and blasted an enormous stream of green fire. Turbo grew to the size of the moon which meant he could take on the fight against the Demon Squid. He wasn’t as big as the squid but he was fast and was able to bite off the tentacles of the squid one by one. The Demon Squid was now a giant blob with no limbs. Kirsty was her own one man support crew cheering on Jack and Turbo but then it lashed out its tounge and swallowed them whole (yeah you would think it would have been full by now). It was now all up to Troy. “It’s all up to me” said Troy (hey I just said that said the narrator). “How about you have a taste of your own medicine” said Troy as he went into cartoon mode and so his head grew and grew until it was bigger than the squid itself. He then took one giant bite and swallowed the Demon Squid whole. Troy then realized he didn’t like the taste of squid and barfed up everything the squid had eaten back into its rightful place. The evil wizard then thought it was best not to try that again. The End.
Dear Troy,
ReplyDeleteThis is an amazing improvement in your story writing ability Troy. The first thing I noticed was that your punctuation has improved. You are using a variety of punctuation marks and that makes it easy to read your narrative. Another amazing improvement is your ability to develop the characters with their special abilities and add details to each character. Well done.